I am taking part in the Write Tribe Festival of Words.
And today’s prompt is –
ECHO
“I am leaving,” she said. He looked at her, like a patient mother would at her errant child urging him to explain.
“I am tired of taking initiatives – I proposed to you, I fixed the date of our wedding, I chose this house… it is always ME! I can’t take the lead anymore while you wait for things to happen,” she erupted.
He didn’t understand why should that be a problem? One leads, another follows. But his face remained calm.
“Please say something – shout, cry or slap me hard, just don’t keep sitting there like a Buddha,” she pleaded.
She shook her head, picked up her bag and slammed the door hard. He felt its reverberation for a long time.
(120 words)
Good she left..nice flash fiction Anshu.
Thank you Balaka
Felt the echoes of this story, Anshu.
Thanks D
Good one. Such one side relationships rarely work.
True that
Good one Anshu. I am happy for her, but I would like to know why he chose to be that way. I want to know his side of the story.
He is that way, Meena, he never thought it was a problem until now.
Hmm…… They are definitely not made for each other
You’ve spun a nice tale on the prompt, Anshu. Can hear the echoes even after the story is over!
Thank you Esha
Was he really a useless partner or just too calm and composed? Seems like she did the right thing.
He wasn’t useless Akshata, he was just not proactive
Nice one.
Thank Sonia
Inaction is often taken as indifference. Thus she has a valid and solid reason to desert. Good one Anshu.
Thank you Anagha, you said it rightly, inaction is often taken as indifference.
some people prefer to to follow and take orders. and some are happy to lead from the front and take all decisions.
True Kalpana, different people, different nature
“Like a Buddha”… is what she said. No wonder she was tired of his inertness. Well written!
thank you Madhavi
Good that she took this decision. One-sided relationships tend to be exhausting for the partner who is the most invested in the relationship. Good one for the prompt, Anshu!
thank you Shilpa, yes, a less than proactive partner is no fun
Some people are like that …laidback. she would have suffered if she stayed with him
true Bhagyashree, she was suffering. Where is your story? couldn’t find it
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Nice take on the prompt.
thank you Sunita