PHOTO PROMPT © Priya Bajpai
Written for Friday_Fictioneers
Little Wish
“Can I read just one wish?” Rita asked.
“No!”
“Just a tiny peek!”
“If you read the wish, then God won’t grant it. You should know better, mum,” Thea answered matter-of-factly.
That night, after Thea went to sleep, Rita couldn’t help herself. She had to see what her daughter wrote meticulously each night and put in the mason jar on the dining table.
She opened a yellow one.
“Please send little Theo back.” It read.
Rita opened another one. The same five words. She read all the chits and all had just one wish.
Was Theo supposed to be the brother di???
Dear Anshu,
Touching tale. And it’s left up to the reader to know who little Theo is. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle. Yes that was the idea.
So cute a story. But who’s Theo? Is it some fictional character?
Regards,SLSM.
https://stilllovedstillmissed.wordpress.com/2019/01/09/sweet-tooth/
Theos her baby brother taken away by fate too soon. But he can be anything – a pet or a toy too
Oh I didn’t get that her wish had come true – makes it very dark and even better
Gosh, that was so thought provoking. I wonder what the mother thought? Excellent story.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
Thank you Susanne.. Would have loved to tell about mothers reaction but exceeded the count.
I initially mis-read this as the two names are so similar, but got it once I re-read it!
Thank you Clare for reading the post.
Painfully sad tale.
Loss of a child is every parent’s worst nightmare.
So true.. So true
A world of sadness there. Nicely done.
Thank you Linda
A poignant piece indeed Anshu.
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Thank you Keith
Very well done. A sad little tale.
Thank you Trent
Really hope little Theo is back and all her wishes are granted.
Innocent tale. Want to believe Theo has gone to a family-member’s place or boarding school from where he can be back…
Another Try – Anita
Oh we always like happy endings don’t we. I hope so too for little Thea
Mum has crossed the line, Thea won’t be pleased
True that Michael.. But I am not sure if mum would tell her
You’ve crafted a poignant story. I like the matter-of-fact rebuke that Thea gives her mother.
Thank you Penny.. Kids quite often talk alike adults
Sweet story. What happened to little Theo?
His was a short life abhijit
Unfortunate! Sorry.
Sad but sweet tale.
Thank you Sandra
Oh my goodness. Without telling you have made me feel sad…
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Oh Marian!!
Heartbreaking, all she wanted was her little brother back
So true.. Little people, little wishes
Two possibilities come to mind: one, the disgruntled big sister wanting to send the baby back to wherever it came from. The second is that Little Theo has died and she misses him. The first makes me smile and the second makes my heart ache. Well done!
Thank you.
I wrote the story with the second scénario but à reader is free to choose what they want
Theo could be anyone, a sibling, a pet but the feeling of loss comes through. A bitter-sweet story.
Thank you subroto
Sad and innocent wish for something that cannot be. Well done, Anshu
True dale.. Innocent wish that cannot be
Is Theo her brother or friend? What happened to him? So many questions in that sad ending.
Her brother Bernadette who died too young
What a sad tale, Anshu! It left so many questions unanswered. Do write a sequel, please. Would love to read it.
Thank you Priya.. Will try to
Whether she read them or not, I suspect Theo isn’t coming back. Very sad.
Very true..Liz!!
Oh!! I totally read this as a big sister wanting to send her brother back!! Which is very funny!
Wishing for her brother to come back is in the other hand heartbreaking xx
The ambiguity is really good though!
Thank you so much Anna. As a young child everyone wishes to send their siblings back, but guess when they actually aren’t around, you miss them. Little Thea wants Theo back..but not all wishes can be fulfilled.
This is so heartbreaking. Beautifully told.
Thank you Lisa. Glad you liked it
Innocent turning to heartbreaking. Love this interpretation.
Thank you Suchita. Yes, it’s heartbreaking to see little kids asking for the impossible.
Anshu, this was really beautiful, poignant and so tragic. I belong to the muscular dystrophy association and I have heard some tragic stories through the years of families losingparticularly sons way too young.This group does try to support the siblings aware of the huge impact it also has on them.This story captures all of those emotions and I wonder if this will change how the mother handles her own grief and will she go to greater lengths to shelter the daughter from it. A very interesting and philosophical piece. Well done.
Best wishes,
Rowena
Rowena, thanks for writing to me. My nephew who had muscular dystrophy passed away on 14th Dec. He was almost 27. His maternal uncle had the same thing. The mother is the carrier and the son the sufferer. It’s so difficult to see your child being wasted away day after day before your very eyes. You are doing a great job, Rowena.
Sounds like a bit of sibling rivalry to me.. very clever!
Thank you violet
That probably ripped mom’s heart apart.
I am sure as it woukd do to any mom.
Perfectly done, very sad
Thank you Michael!
A sad tale. Few words that speak so much. Nicely done, Anshu.
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Thanks so much Rohan! Glad you liked it.
Sad story. Hopefully the mother’s interference won’t ruin Thea’s wish.
I hope not! Thanks for reading the story, Sascha!